When writing your admissions materials, be conscious of your word and phrasing choices. While it’s tempting to speak in “business” language, this can make it difficult for the AdCom to connect with you on a personal level. Additionally, using buzzwords or “impressive” language can give the impression that you have difficulty communicating in clear, relatable language. Since AdComs seek candidates who can communicate clearly to a wide range of people, simplifying and abbreviating will work in your interest. A good rule of thumb is to ask yourself, “Do I sound like a real person or like a marketing brochure?”
In this example, the candidate has used clear, simple language to describe her strengths and work contributions. This phrasing quickly conveys the relevant information to the AdCom, showing that she values their time. The clarity of the phrasing shows that the candidate can communicate effectively with any audience, regardless of their background, reflecting emotional maturity.